Genre: MG contemporary
Word
count: 30,000
Query:
When eleven-year-old Mary-Jane “MJ” Lennox’s mother dies and
her father is deployed to Korea, she never cries. Not once. Sent to live with
her grandmother on the icy tundra of Alaska, she thinks her young life is over,
until she discovers an abandoned and forbidden greenhouse. And inside is a
neglected garden full of hope.
After MJ receives word that her
father is missing in action, she throws herself into saving the garden. With
the help of her friend Nanook Tuktoo, MJ restores the dead garden to life as
the Alaskan summer brings twenty-four hour light. She hopes the rejuvenating
power of the garden will also help cure her young neighbor, Colin, of his
cancer.
But as the sun begins to set, the flowers slow their blooming, Colin worsens, and her father remains missing, MJ thinks all is lost. Now she must find the strength to overcome her pain and learn that crying isn’t a sign of weakness, and hope can carry anyone through darkness.
But as the sun begins to set, the flowers slow their blooming, Colin worsens, and her father remains missing, MJ thinks all is lost. Now she must find the strength to overcome her pain and learn that crying isn’t a sign of weakness, and hope can carry anyone through darkness.
Excerpt:
When
the minute hand on the clock above the whiteboard ticked to the fourteen mark, I
shot my hand up so fast my shoulder popped in its socket.
Mrs.
Nashoalook stopped her rambling on photosynthesis. “Yes, Mary-Jane?”
It’s MJ, I thought, but
the last time I corrected her she’d said my record didn’t show a nickname and
I’d have to go by Mary-Jane. Grams must’ve filled out the registration papers.
Daddy would’ve put MJ.
“May
I please use the commode?” I said, my hand still waving in the air with urgency.
She
blinked. “The commode?”
Did
they not call it that in Alaska? “The toilet, ma’am. I gotta go real bad.”
A
wave of giggles washed over the classroom.
“I
know what a commode is.” Mrs. Nashoalook focused her eyes back on her sixth
grade science textbook, but I saw a secret smile spread on her brown lips. “Be
quick.”
“Thank
you!” I sprang out of my tush-numbing seat-desk combo and waited in the hall
for the door to close. I didn’t want Mrs. Nashoalook to see me turning left
instead of right.
At
the front desk, the secretary’s back was turned, so it wasn’t hard to sneak
past her to the exit. But the bronze glare of Eben Hopson, my new middle
school’s namesake, caught me. He was just a statue, but his hollow eyes gave me
the heebie jeebies.
I
stepped outside and my nose hairs froze, a feeling I’d never get used to
because it felt like I had a big booger wanting to be picked.

I *love* the voice of your first page. And Alaskan Secret Garden? Oh I just want to read this badly :) Good luck! :D
ReplyDeleteGO GO MG!! Your voice is so powerful - love it. Can't wait to see this get snatched!
ReplyDeleteYou had me at Alaska. Secret garden and frozen nose hairs were just topping on the cake!!! GOOD LUCK!!!
ReplyDeleteSuch a great premise. Love the voice in the first 250!
ReplyDeleteThe voice in your 250 words is great, and I love the idea of The Secret Garden in Alaska. :)
ReplyDeleteOooooh! I'm so curious about this garden and I love your style of writing. Good luck! :)
ReplyDelete<3 THE SECRET GARDEN. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThis looks great! I'm happy to request it.
ReplyDelete-Mollie
I'd be happy to take a look! - Kate
ReplyDeleteI'd love to see this!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like a special book. I'd love to see it.
ReplyDeleteLove the idea of a Secret Garden retelling. Would like to read more of this!
ReplyDeleteMonika
You've been ninja'd! I would love to see a pitch, one-page synopsis, and the first fifty pages. Please send it as a word attachment to...(contact Brenda for further details!). Looking forward to reading your work :)
ReplyDelete--RED NINJA